Short Story

I'm writing a short story, and I'm wondering which would people prefer:

1: To have a mystical creature that befriended a human boy, but to later find out that this creature is only imaginary

or

2: To start the story with a seemingly mystical creature that befriended a human boy, but shortly after being told that the creature might be imaginary.

the first one...

maybe a sad boy... somethings upsetting him... maybe he is being bullied... you could start off with something like...

Tom was a normal 13 year old boy. He likes to play football like all the other boys...
So why did Tom have no friends? He wasn't nasty, in fact he was a caring and intelligent young man. He definitely was not a show off, He was too quit and shy. So why was Tom isolated from the others, Ganged upon and thrown nothing but insults. He didn't want to tell his mom. Maybe she would laugh at him who knows?

If i were you Try and use short sentences for a effect of suspense. You could also have a sad ending... I hate reading books so if This boy was Bullied and had no one to turn to maybe he made up a creature his mom would hear him "talking to it" and she took him to a specialist who tells him its an Imaginative image. The day after the bullies could do something really nasty and the Boy ends up hanging himself...

I like books with meaning as I said... and This could actually be a SHOCKER story. It could be read by bullies and the bullied to give out the impression to put their foot down and stop... I would enjoy reading it...

Ah, but there is a twist here, mon frere. The creature proves itself to be real before leaving the boy. I just wanted to know at what time would a reader prefer to be told that the boy thought that this creature was imaginary.

I would say when you least expect it... that would just throw the story into your face and you would HAVE to read why

Excellent. I was considering using that approach but really needed an outside opinion.

Im currently writing a novel about a wolf who falls in love with another

Really thats awesome, me and my 2 other friends at school are writing a scary story about us and what would happen if our town got over ran by zombies while we are at school, but the virus actually started in our science room.

Sweet. Do the zombies run or walk? Decayed or sensitive to sunlight?

we havnt got that far but that would be awesome, now we are going to make them run, its snowing so theirs no sunlight.

Awesome... and a little spooky.
Yeah, the short story I'm writing is for a contest... The deadline's tomorrow!

U better win i bet ur stories potatoes :3

Lokistar wrote:U better win i bet ur stories potatoes :3

I second that!

muhahaha *cough* *splutter* (needs to work on evil laugh) I need to start typing faster... I still haven't done much on my book.... any who Longstorm better give us all a cut *wink ink* " I know where he lives!" <---- has anyone used this smiley

Lol, if I do win, I'll tell everyone that my fellow RPers did some major suggestion-ing and support!

Hmmmph!Nice story.I hate happy endings.Thats why in my fan fics it's always dark,bloody,evil,and not a good idea for a bedtime story.Hehe.

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